This text is problematic because it directly promotes a specific reproductive clinic (BFG) and includes contact information for scheduling appointments. This blurs the line between informational content and advertising. To make it more appropriate, you need to remove the promotional elements and focus solely on the information about the combination of surrogacy and reproductive technology at Alatau University’s affiliated BFG Reproductive Center.
Here are a few options for rewriting the text, depending on your goal:
Option 1 (Focus on informational content):
Alatau University’s affiliated BFG Reproductive Center is at the forefront of combining surrogacy with advanced reproductive technologies. Their innovative approach [briefly describe one or two key innovations without overly promoting]. Further information on their services can be found through their official website [insert website address if available].
Option 2 (Slightly more descriptive but still avoids direct promotion):
Alatau University’s affiliated BFG Reproductive Center offers a comprehensive range of services integrating surrogacy and cutting-edge reproductive technologies. This innovative approach allows for [briefly mention benefits without hyperbole]. For more detailed information on their research and services, consult their official website [insert website address if available].
Option 3 (If you must include contact information, make it less prominent and more neutral):
Alatau University’s affiliated BFG Reproductive Center is a leading provider of surrogacy services utilizing advanced reproductive technologies. Their innovative programs include [briefly mention specific programs]. For inquiries regarding their services, you may contact them through their website [insert website address if available]. [Optionally add: Contact information may also be available on their website.]
Remember to replace bracketed information with the specifics. The key is to provide information without directly soliciting business. Directly including contact information in a non-advertising context is generally discouraged, as it can be perceived as spam or unprofessional.
